Important Theme, Poor Execution

  • A Sound Like Fire
  • K. D. Veron ©2011
  • West Bow Press
  • A division of Thomas Nelson
  • ISBN 978-1-4497-3085-7 (e)
  • Also available in HD and SC

     Sadly, this important and mostly truthful theme drowns in poor writing. The author sounds passionate about his theme, but the writing will limit the audience a great deal.
     If I’d not promised to write a review, I’d have given up on the book after a chapter or two. I did struggle through to the half way point.

     A dictionary would have provided the correct meaning for dozens of words. Learning to write fiction-type dialogue prevents nearly every spoken sentence sounding like the same character with different names. Stereotypical characters, such as the main character and his mistress, don’t impress readers.

       Good writers tell a story that keeps readers interested and changes lives. A series of lectures disguised as story turns readers off.

     Editors say over and over, ‘Show, don’t tell’. Too much narrative is not ‘show’. ‘Show’ keeps readers involved in a book, the reason editors seek this technique.

     A few times I found good descriptions and a few good metaphors. This suggests this author could learn to be a good writer and send out a successful message.

      But ‘purple’ descriptions and metaphors….sigh! An example: when the main character experienced the cold weather like ‘a surgeon’s knife slicing skin’. Cold winds draw blood and cause open wounds? An insult to surgeons?

      The second poorly written book I’ve read recently from West Bow, I’ll avoid this publisher’s products in the future.

 

Cover picture of Book by K. D. Veron
A Sound Like Fire
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About samcivy

I read my first book a week after beginning first grade and haven't slowed down in seventy years. My system often wakes me in the night so I keep books on a chair in the bathroom and do a LOT of reading. I'm a free-lance writer/editor and review books for various authors as well as Thomas Nelson Publishers and Amazon.com. I will soon be posting books for a blog tour by KathyWillis.com, a book promoter.
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  1. Pingback: Walking into Words (Even More on Writing Dialogue) and Theme | Poetic Mapping: Walking into Art

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